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好学英文网了解众多学生需求,特对“难忘的一件事英语作文”来一次全方位的写作指导,希望对大家深入学习相关英语作文写作有所帮助:

作为一名高三毕业班的学生,多次的"考场磨炼"中肯定有许多难忘的故事,考试过程中"或"成绩发布后"你最难忘的一次经历,写一篇120-150词的演讲稿,准备在英语课堂演讲比赛中登台演讲。

发言稿的开头已经给出,不计入总词数。

Good afternoon! Everybody!

I’m glad to be here to share one of my unforgettable experiences with you.

分析:

1. 确定写作话题。本写作任务要求写一篇记叙文,写作话题是一次难忘的经历,但仔细审题,会发现写作任务对写作内容有一定的提示和限制。文章的话题是"考试过程中"或"成绩发布后"一次难忘的经历,作者可以根据回忆,记述一次难忘的考试经历;也可以描述考试成绩发布后自己受到表扬或批评的故事。但前提是"令人难忘"的,也就是具有特别意义的一次经历。

2. 难忘经历的描述。因为是记叙文,文章可以按照事情发生、发展和结局的顺序去安排写作,语言要准确,选词要丰富,句式要灵活、富于变化,尽量尝试使用一些结构较复杂的句子,提高表达的质量。人称主要用第一人称,时态主要要用一般过去时。

3. 安排篇章结构。此类记叙文可以从以下三个层面展开写作:第一,简单叙述写作的目的——介绍一次难忘的经历,并引出事情的内容概要,作为全文的主题句或主题段;第二,详细叙述事情的发生、发展和结局,注意写作内容要有实际意义,要真正引人注意、耐人回味,以达到令人难忘的效果。最后,谈谈自己的感受或评论得与失,做以总结。好学英文网提供范文

4. 参考句和词语。文章在提出话题,描述难忘的经历时可用:This is the most interesting / wonderful / regretful ... thing that I will never forget. / I will remember one thing that happened ... forever.等;在叙述事情的发展过程时可以用:at first, then, finally / in the end等;过渡性的词语可以用:however, what’s more, besides等。

初稿:

Good afternoon! Everybody!

I’m glad to be here to share one of my unforgettable experiences with you. It happened during the midterm examinations. I was studying in senior one at the time.

I was not very good at English and so I used to worry about it. Luckily I found my good friend Li Yang sitting in front of me and he was very good at English. However, when I whispered to him for the answers, he refused to give me any help, which made me feel unhappy. I failed that examination and my teacher was very unhappy with me. I made up my mind not to be friends with him any longer.

A few days later, he came over to chat with me. It was then that I realized my mistake of trying to cheat during the exam. Later he offered to help me with my English study. We practiced reading and writing a lot in our spare time and I made great progress with his help. In the final exam I was praised by my teacher.

好学英文网教师点评:

1. 初稿描述了作者在一次英语考试中"企图抄袭却遭到好友的拒绝,而后得到他的帮助取得进步"的经历。文章谋篇布局较合理,故事叙述脉络清晰,时态和语态的运用准确无误。句子间使用一些过渡和衔接词语,显得比较自然合理。该文章基本算是一篇不错的文章。

2. 文章存在的问题: