◇第一段思路点评：综述网络给人们生活带来的多彩和便捷。两个长句足矣。第一句用if引导的条件句引出“网络”话题，第二句概述网络带给多彩和便捷的生活。
◇语言点提示：
has drawn…, realized, and provided此为谓语连动式的运用。

◇第二段思路点评：详述网络与人们生活的紧密关系，先总述，后分述。
◇语言点提示：
resort to借助、诉诸、求助于

◇第三段思路点评：先陈述人们对网络的依赖，再谈对此的看法。
◇语言点提示：
（1）negative effects副作用、反面作用
（2）addicts成瘾者、依恋者
（3）fantasy world虚拟世界、虚幻世界
（4）pornography色情表演、色情作品
（5）fraud欺骗、诈骗

【范文二】

As a primary source of information as well as an efficient means of communication, the Internet offers people a colourful and convenient life. Just by clicking the mouse, we can enjoy a brilliant and easy life that could not be achieved ever before: shopping, making friends, contacting relatives, looking for jobs, downloading music and movies, conducting business deals, and freely airing our opinions.

For its convenience, the Internet has attracted people like magnets and some people even claim that it is indispensable. To them, life can’t go on without it. Every day millions of people spend hours on end surfing the Internet. They are obsessed with it so much so that they forget many other important matters.

As for me, I don’t approve of unrestrained Internet reliance. Although the Internet is a gift of the technological revolution and a blessing of this information age, we should never let it control our life. The Internet absolutely doesn’t mean the whole world to us. Instead, we should guard against its negative effects. To those Internet addicts, I would add: “Self-control can make or break your life. With proper use, the Internet serves you; otherwise, it kills you.”

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