Do you like sports? All over the world people enjoy sports.Sports help people to keep healthy,happy and help them to live longer.

Sports change with the season ,people play different sports in winter and summer.In winter ,people usually go skate ,and in summer ,people usually swim or play football.

Some sports are so interesting that people everywhere go in for them .Football, for example ,has spread around the world .And basketball is very popular,too.Lots of boys like to play basketball.

Playing basketball is very interesting

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小作者以sports为主题，描述了自己对体育运动的看法，全篇来看，意义表达比较清楚，内容切题，第一段作者总体写运动的好处，第二段写一些运动的种类，第三段是以football和basketball为例子来说明运动的乐趣。第二段和第三段不用分开，分开之后显得逻辑不紧密。文中需要改进的地方参考如下：

1. All over the world people enjoy sports.这句话作者要表达的意思应该是'全世界的人都爱运动'，应该把all over the world 放到people后面作后置定语，才能表达这个意思。
2. Sports change with the season ,这里应该是一句话，因为主谓宾都完整，所以句末要用句号。change with这个短语用得很好，值得表扬。
3. In winter ,people usually go skate ,'滑冰'是go skating, 要用-ing形式。
4. Lots of boys like to play basketball. 这里要提到like后面用to do 与doing 的区别，如果是平时习惯性的爱好，就应该用doing, 如果是某次具体的动作就用to do . 所以这里应该用doing.改为Lots of boys like playing basketball.
5. 最后一句是不是作者后面还没写完呢？如果是写完了的话，这句话与前面的内容重复，应该删除。

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Do you like sports? People all over the world enjoy sports.Sports help people to keep healthy,happy and help them to live longer.

Sports change with the season ,people play different sports in winter and summer.In winter ,people usually go skating, and in summer ,people usually swim or play football. Some sports are so interesting that people everywhere go in for them .Football, for example ,has spread around the world .And basketball is very popular,too.Lots of boys like playing basketball.

小作者的行文思路比较清晰，虽然有些错误，但是纵观全局，可以得出小作者的英语基础比较扎实，比如 so....that句型的使用，change with 的运用，都是值得表扬的，希望小作者以后多多练习，英语能够达到更高的水平。

1. 全文分段不合理扣除1分。
2. 意义表达有歧义，如All over the world people ....扣除1分。
3. 短语形式运用错误，如: go skate,扣除1分。
4. 标点符号，断句不正确，扣除1分。
5. 动词形式不正确，如：like to play. 扣除1分