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摘要:My favourite colour我最喜欢的颜色好学英文网提供的中文翻译及点评见英文版下方 There're many different kinds of colours in the world, such as white, blue, orange…

我最喜欢的颜色英语作文好学英文网刘志宏编辑点评

这篇作文整体上来说还是不错的,不过有些单词用的不恰当,我都在文中改过了。

主要问题有以下几个方面:

1 忘记了单复数 比如开头的colours应该用复数

2 单词用的不恰当 文中用了WATCH来表示看,其实在这里用look比较合适,应为watch表示的是一种动态的看,看的目标是动态的,比如看比赛,看电视之类。

3 词性没有注意到。nature是名词,在文中多次用做了形容词,其实形容词的话应该用natural。

4 还有一些表达语法是正确的,但是却不符合外国人的说话习惯。比如Do you know why? 所以我改成了更接近外国人说话习惯的方式。

5 最后一点就是I don't know why I am like green, only like it. Maybe it's the colour of the life 。

感觉文章前后矛盾,并且还有些重复。前面说了很多自己为什么喜欢绿色的原因,但是这里突然一转,说自己不知道为什么喜欢绿色,是不是有点自相矛盾呢?it's the colour of the life 这句话在前文已经出现过,在这里再次出现感觉有点重复。

我在这里没有帮你写10个句子。因为我觉得你的英语水平应该还可以,学习是自己的事情,你的水平足够做到,只要你自己去想,去做。所以我只帮你把作文中的错误修改了过来。

原文如下(未经好学英文网编辑修改过的原文):
My favourite colour
There're many different kinds of colour in the world, such as white, blue, orange, red, and so on. But my favourite colour is green.

I think green is the most beautiful colour. Do you know why? Because green is the colour of life. Do you think so? As you know, most alive plants are green, like grass and trees. Green is good for our eyes, too. When your eyes are very tired, you will watch the green trees or green grass, they can help you to relax your eyes. From hxw.red.

And I think green is the nature colour, I love nature things. Ohm, to tell you the truth, I don't know why I am like green, only like it. Maybe it's the colour of the life or…… Can you tell me what your favourite colour is?