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摘要:09年6月英语四级作文预测及范文:月光族/Directions: For this part, you are allowed 30 minutes to write a composition on the topic The Moonlight Clan.…

09年6月英语四级作文预测及范文:月光族

Directions: For this part, you are allowed 30 minutes to write a composition on the topic The Moonlight Clan. You should write at least 120 words, and base your composition on the outline (given in Chinese) below: 

1)现在很多年轻人每个月都把自己赚的钱花光,他们被称作“月光族”

2)有人认为这是一种时尚的消费观念,但很多人反对这样消费

3)我对此的看法是……

【行文思路】

本题属于提纲式文字命题。提纲第1点指出一种现象,提纲第2点针对该现象提出两种不同的观点,提纲第3点要求谈谈“我”的看法,由此可判断本文应为对比选择型作文。
  根据所给提纲,本文应包含如下内容:描述“月光族”现象,引出对这一现象的不同看法;对比阐述两种看法各自的理由;表明“我”对“月光族”的看法并说明理由。
  高分范文

The Moonlight Clan
  Nowadays, more and more people, [1]especially the young are joining in the army of “the moonlight clan”. These people exhaust their earnings every month without any savings. [2]Many people think this is a fashionable life style, [2]while more other people object to this kind of consumption style.
  [3]Those who support “the moonlight clan” think that those people know how to enjoy life and have a higher life quality. [3]However, more other people criticize “the moonlight clan”. They say that the consumption habit of “the moonlight clan” is unhealthy and sometimes wasteful. In addition, no savings will [4]place “the moonlight clan” in a difficult position [5]in case of unexpected expenses.
  [6]Weighing these two arguments, I prefer to the latter one. In my eyes, [7]though “the moonlight clan” may acquire temporary satisfaction from their consumption, [8]in the long term, it [9]is unfavorable to their family and career. [10]Just as a proverb says, one should always prepare for a rainy day.

【亮点点评】

[1]“尤其,特别”。
  [2]用于提出两种对立观点。
  [3]用于引出两种对立观点各自的理由。
  [4]“使…处于艰难的境地”。
  [5]“以防,万一”。
  [6]用于表明“我”的倾向。
  [7]though引导让步状语从句。
  [8]“从长远来看”。
  [9]“对…不利”。
  [10]引用谚语结尾,值得借鉴。

【佳句临摩】

1.佳句:Many people think this is a fashionable life style, while more other people object to this kind of consumption style.

临摩:勇敢的人往往会获得更多的机会,而懦弱的人面对机会也有可能错过。

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  2.佳句:Those who support “the moonlight clan” think that those people know how to enjoy life and have a higher life quality.
  临摩:持悲观态度的那些人认为地球上有限的能源很快就会枯竭。
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  3.佳句:Just as a proverb says, o
  , one should always prepare for a rainy day.
  临摩:正如一句谚语所说的,“机会只给那些有准备的人。”
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