猪外婆：

Dear Kofi Annan,

I am a student from China. I am writing to expand on my personal opinion about the situation of the world peace.

To begin with, there are some factors which do harm to the peace of world. A case in point is: a large-scale war in Iraqi is started by Bush administration. If this war enlarges, it may give rise to a comprehensive war all over the world. Undoubtedly, however, it is an inevitable trend that peace is socially acceptable. The myriad of people have the idea that we need a peaceful environment. Additionally, an army of American citizens accuse Bush of setting armies to Iraqi.

On my personal level, the United Nation must take a leading role to medicate the conflicts of the world. And dear sir, as a peacemaker, you should be respected by a multitude of people. It is beyond doubt that the period of war is coming to an end and a whole new era of lasting peace will turn up. I am fully convinced that you can evoke support of all the countries. I am hoping that the peace of world will come true early.

Respectfully yours,

ZWP

错误：

1.to expand on my personal opinion / to express my opinion

2.started by Bush administration. / launched by the Bush Administration

3.If this war enlarges, / If this war escalates,

4.setting armies to Iraqi / sending troops to Iraq.

5.must take a leading role to medicate / must take a leading role in mediating

Blonde：

November 8,2004

Dear Kofi Annan,

As everyone knows,It is vitally important for people to maintain world’s peace and maintain peaceful relations is duty by The United Nations .

However,most country at war and the people at deep fire and water now. such as Iraq war at current ,whenever i am think this,my heart is very ache .I am worry about this people.

So ,I think it necessary to do maintain peaceful relations .

At that time, I am ask you to rescue that people .so that this people are gain freedom. and I hope maintain peaceful relations by The United Nations.

Yours faithfully,

blonde

错误：

1.Dear Kofi Annan / Dear Mr. Kofi Annan

2.It is vitally important for people to maintain world’s peace and maintain peaceful relations is duty by The United Nations / it is vitally important for people to maintain the world peace, and the maintenance of it is a duty of the UN.

3.most country at war and the people at deep fire and water now. such as Iraq war at current / most countries are at war and their people live in hot water, such as the current Iraq War.

4.my heart is very ache / my heart aches

5.I think it necessary to do maintain peaceful relations ./ I deem it necessary to maintain ….

6.I am ask you to / I am asking you

7.so that people are gain freedom / so that people will gain freedom

8.I hope maintain peaceful relations by The United Nations. / I hope that the UN will contribute more to the maintenance of ….

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